Midnight Fantasies: Mystery Lover; After Hours; Show and Tell Book

Mystery Lover- 3.5

Jonas mentions how he remembers every girl he's slept with and the color of her pubes? Seriously?

After Jonas and BJ meet the first time in the cave, BJ goes to leave. Why doesn't Jonas peek out to see who she is? I'm surprised BJ didn't think he'd peek.

Sorry but having a guy do oral on you, or the other way around, a girl go down on a guy, neither, in my opinion is considered 'making love'.

Why does she refer to her father by his first name?

How old is BJ to where she has to constantly tell her father where she'll be? Like she needs permission?

Jonas is checking out BJ in her jeans. "...the back seam of her jeans was pretty damn snug against her crotch. She had a nice package there." First off, 'the back seam' would be the seam on the butt. Secondly, aren't females jean usually close to the crotch part? I mean it's not like they need extra space for something. It's usually a flat area unless you've got a huge bush. Lastly, saying a female has a 'nice package' in regards to her crotch? Um?!?!

On page 65, Jonas decides to change his name to Jason. haha How does that happen?

Were tighty whities ever really a huge thing? As in you'd rather have your guy wear those, instead of boxers? Just curious.

How did BJ never think that Jonas would ask around town about Sarah? I mean come on! If the town is that small...
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After Hours 3/4

This was an alright story but I felt the whole platonic to sexual relationship came on way too fast! It's like the same day they're told to go out and have a fling, they do it even though neither wanted to.

Lana met a lawyer through a personal ad, yet neither had placed one? How does that work?

Apparently Quincy had told Michael that Rebecca was closing early. Obviously trying to set them up. So why didn't she say that it wasn't true?

Rebecca has just put together the vampire/cape costume and is trying it on. "...a familiar warmth growing in her thighs..." So she gets turned on dressing up?

After Michael catches Rebecca in her costume, why in the world did she think he would laugh at her? I mean seriously, she's got all this skin showing....he's a guy...

I'm not sure the author understood what the word 'fairly' meant in her story. Examples:

"She was fairly shaking, and her cheeks felt warm."
(It would be like saying she was partially shaking.)
"His ear fairly grew before her eyes."
(Or his ears partially grew.)
Neither make sense.

After having sex with Michael the first time, she's wondering if she's 'falling for him'? Um...hadn't she already?

How old are these people? Is Ike an older or younger brother? I find it strange how immature he is considering he's been married 4 times!

If Harry is a blow up sex doll...why does she leave him out in the open? What about his hard-on?

Questionable phrases:

"...imagining herself to be a she-vampire"? Huh?

"Her body became engorged with desire"? Or just referring to a female vampire as a 'she-vampire'. Can't you just say she was a vampire. ?
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Show and Tell 4/4

Obviously I liked this story the most. IDK something about the fact that both main characters had a thing for each other, yet, both played it off; she was mean and he just pretended to like her. I liked that concept. Thankfully I don't have questions or anything either for this one.